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The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice producing countries in the world in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below provides information about the top ten rice producing countries in the world in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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 the highest 15 rice-producing
contries
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countries
 in the world in 2015.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that China and India were
biggest
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the biggest
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 two contributors, were Brazil and Japan had the lightest weight.
firstly
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, China harvested over 140000
thousands ton
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 of rice, followed by India, which lags behind in second place with production hovering around 100000.
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, the collective amount of the countries in the leading two ranks
is
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 nearly
equevalent
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equivalent
 to what the remaining countries could allocate.
Secondly
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, 4 regions gathered similar amounts within the same trailing year
were
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Indoneshia
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Indonesia
,
Bangladsh
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Bangladesh
,
Veitnam
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Vietnam
, and
Thiland
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Thailand
, with values ranging from 30000 to 20000 following the same order.
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, as Brazil and Japan arrived
last
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, they were both exactly 10000 short compared to Banama and
Philipenes
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Philippines
 who could afford their people roughly enough food that year.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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