The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows how one type of coal is used to produce electricity. Summarise the information by selectting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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the graph illustrates that
electricity
is generated from one kind of coal.
Overall
, the process contains several complex stages, beginning with coal being exploited, and ending with
electricity
being transacted to residents or factories. In the first stage, these pieces of big coal are exploited from the mine areas; and
then
sent to the specialized machines to crush it into the grinds.
Afterward
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, the mass coal is transported to the gasifier for heating at high degrees to produce the
gas
. In the subsequent stage, the
gas
is sent to the other factory for cooling, and the high-heat
gas
is emitted outside by chimneys. In the next stage, the hot air is sent to the cleaning treatment through pipes, before generating
electricity
and continuing to be wasted heat in the
gas
power plant.
Finally
, the
electricity
is sold to households and industrial consumers.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • thermal coal
  • crushed
  • combustion
  • heat energy
  • boil
  • steam
  • turbine
  • generator
  • mechanical energy
  • electrical energy
  • transformers
  • voltage
  • transmitted
  • power lines
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