You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australla, Fo someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter • explain why you think you would be suitable for the job • say what e/se you could do for the family • give your reasons for wanting the job

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Dear Sir/Madam, Hope

this

email finds you well. I have recently

came

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across an

adverstisment

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and found that you are looking for

Spanish

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a Spanish

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native speaker that

also

lives in Australia and can teach your children the Language for a year. Five

year

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years

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ago I moved to Australia to teach

Spanish

at University and currently begun working as a freelancer. I

belive

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believe

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backgroud

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background

Australian

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the Australian

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education system

coupled with

native

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my native

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Spanish

backgroud

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background

would provide you with exactly what you are looking for.

Moreover

, I have

expirience

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experience

working at elementary school back in Mexico and know well how

communicate

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to communicate

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with children. If you would be

ineterested

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interested

I can

also

watch after

children

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the children

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on the weekends since most of my online classes happen during the week. We can

focuse

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focus

more on everyday communication to improve their

Spanish

Therefore

, I can teach them how to cook our traditional Mexican food which

also

can help them improve

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their

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language. The main reason for wanting

this

job is

in-person

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the in-person

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format. Most of my classes are held online and I would like to start focusing on in-person lessons more. The other reason is that most of my

student

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students

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are adults and I want to make my students more

age diverse

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. Wish you a great day and hope we see each other soon! Faithfully yours, Sofiia Lyefi

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Coherence & Cohesion

Improve the logical flow by ensuring smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

Task Achievement

Clarify some sentences for greater clarity and avoid small errors in grammar and spelling.

Coherence & Cohesion

The greeting and closing are suitable for a semi-formal letter.

Task Achievement

The letter addresses all the points required by the task prompt.

Task Achievement

The tone is appropriate for an application letter, demonstrating interest and a respectful approach.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

220 words

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