The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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information about how many
people
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taking
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part in many
kind
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of physical activities
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2001 and 2009 in Australia.
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there
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an increase in
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number
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of
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engaged in running, aerobics and tennis , it was clearly
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a decrease in
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number
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taking part in cycling and
swmming
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over the period of 8 years
People
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engaging
running
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in running

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,
areobics
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and tennis
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1.4
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, 1.5
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and 1
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respectively in 2001, there
an
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increase in
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number
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a number
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of
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for three activities between 2001 and 2009,
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enjoying running
make
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a
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biggest proportion at 156% change.
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people
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participating in aerobics and tennis are increased at 11% and 15% respectively. Cycling and swimming were chosen with the decrease amount from 4.5
billion
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and 3.7
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respectively in 2001, and the
number
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of
people
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decreased to 3.6 million and 3.3 million in 2009, with the percentage of change was under 0%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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