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The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the change in number of people engaged in various physical activities between the years 2001-2009 in Australia (in million people). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides
the
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apply
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information about how many
people
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taking
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took
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 part in many
kind
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kinds
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 of physical activities
from
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between
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 2001 and 2009 in Australia.
Overall
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,
While
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 there
are
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is
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 an increase in
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 engaged in running, aerobics and tennis , it was clearly
seen
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apply
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a decrease in
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number
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the number
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 of
people
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 taking part in cycling and
swmming
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swimming
 over the period of 8 years
People
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 engaging
running
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in running
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,
areobics
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aerobics
 and tennis
are
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were
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 1.4
billion
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, 1.5
billion
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 and 1
billion
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 respectively in 2001, there
an
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was an
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 increase in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
people
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 for three activities between 2001 and 2009,
people
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 enjoying running
make
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made
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a
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the
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 biggest proportion at 156% change.
While
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people
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 participating in aerobics and tennis are increased at 11% and 15% respectively. Cycling and swimming were chosen with the decrease amount from 4.5
billion
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 and 3.7
billion
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 respectively in 2001, and the
number
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 of
people
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 decreased to 3.6 million and 3.3 million in 2009, with the percentage of change was under 0%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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