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: The pie charts below describe the electric energy production a major source of energy in the US. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts

: The pie charts below describe the electric energy production a major source of energy in the US. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts
The pie charts
provides
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provide
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 information about the
electric
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apply
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major
source
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sources
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 of energy
is
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apply
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produced in the US
Overall
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,
while
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 the energy
production
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 from oil, natural gas and coal accounted for the largest
propotion
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proportion
,
hydro electric
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hydroelectric
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power
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 and nuclear
power
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 as a source of
engery
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energy
 were produced with similar percentages in 1980 and 1990. The percentage of oil in
engergy
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energy
production
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 decreased
however
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 in general, the proportion accounted for the largest percentage in the US was 42% in 1980 and 33% in 1990,
whereas
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 the
engery
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energy
production
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 from natural gas was approximately 25% in 1980 and 1990, the coal
production
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 in 1980 and 1990 was 22% and 27% respectively. the
production
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 of
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hydroelectric
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hydro electric
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hydroelectric
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power
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 accounted for an exact amount
of
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apply
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percentage in 1980 and 1990 at 5%,
while
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 nuclear
power
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production
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 was 5% and 10% respectively in 1980 and 1990

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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