The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of young people in higher education in 2000, 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the
amount
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number
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of teenagers in higher
education
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from 2000, 2005 and 2010 in various
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country
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countries
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.
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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most young people
who
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apply
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achieved
to
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apply
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the next
education
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is
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in
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country
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D in 2010.
While
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,
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apply
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country
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A
has
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had
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the least people who
get
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got
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to higher
education
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in 2000. Looking at the 2000 bar, teenagers in
country
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A stood at nearly 40% which is the lowest per
cent
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in every
country
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and period. Meanwhile, in
country
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B 40% of them are going to the next
education
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and the rest
country
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are having
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has
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the
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apply
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half per
cent
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of young people who chose to pursue their studies. Moving to the future, in 2010
country
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A's teenagers going to higher studies
has
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apply
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increased dramatically until slightly
hits
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hitting
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60 per
cent
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.
Moreover
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,
country
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D gradually increased until made up to 80 per
cent
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which is the highest
from
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of
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any
country
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. Whilst,
country
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B remained as
last
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fifteen years ago and it
happen
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the same as
country
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C which only increased a mere of 5 per
cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education, country, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • notable
  • significant
  • comparison
  • higher education
  • young people
  • year-on-year
  • socio-economic factors
  • government policy
  • economic conditions
  • cultural attitudes
  • globalization
  • educational reforms
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