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Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that we should limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite these warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be encouraged to take an interest in protecting the environment?

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Nowadays, environmental protection is the most prominent matter. Many experts are trying to convince the public to preserve the environment and its resources which can offer long-term benefits.
This
 essay will discuss
this
 issue in detail and will outline the feasible solutions. There are various reasons
of
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 not limiting the use of energy in our daily lives. The first and foremost is the modern lifestyle. Using private vehicles
have
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 become inexorable, they require fossil fuel for energy. The emissions from these vehicles contribute to global warming and
also
 create many respiratory problems.
Furthermore
, a large demographic of society generates income by selling
thses
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these
 fossil fuels. In
this
 way, it is not
formidable
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 for them to avoid these warnings.
However
, their vocation can have
a
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negative consequences on the environment, but they will avoid them to make their ends meet. The encouragement for the preservation of the planet can only be done by spreading awareness via social and broadcasting media. The government should hire influential people in order to promote interest in
public
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. Distinguished individuals have
massive
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 fan following, their followers imitate their steps. If an actor or a singer is hired to plant a tree, in order to convey the message of protecting and restoring the resources.
This
 gesture can start a mass movement.
However
, the public interest can be provoked
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 these
stratagies
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strategies
. In conclusion, people usually avoid these warnings for their personal gain
while
 it is necessary to be cautious of our atmosphere before
this
 issue becomes insurmountable.
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task achievement
Strengthen the connection between lifestyle choices and environmental impact.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support arguments, such as statistics or case studies.
coherence cohesion
Improve the flow by adding more linking words or phrases.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to spelling: "thses" should be "these," and "stratagies" should be "strategies."
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion emphasizing the importance of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Well-structured paragraphs that address different parts of the question.
task achievement
Good use of examples related to modern lifestyle and media influence.

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