Airline compaines in many countries have reduced the cost of tickets. discuss whether it is a positive or negative development.

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The cost of
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been dropped by airline industries in numerous nations. It raises
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it has more positives or drawbacks. In my perspective, it brings more benefits rather demerits. One of the main advantages is , reduction in the
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has made commuting more affordable
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previous
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. When travelling by
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, mainly in charge
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pockets of wealthy people, but now even lower class are
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able to think about it.
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visited four times to my cousin in Bali,
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my vacations that not even possible before owing to high
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price of
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tickets not merely improves the quality of life of many but
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proves useful for promoting the greater cultural exchange around the world.
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price of
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also
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on
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country
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level as well. Undoubtedly, more budget-friendly
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tickets
leads
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to
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tourism worldwide, resulting in , it creates more job employment in various sectors including hospitality or entertainment.
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, many people prefer to travel by
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for their business or personal purposes
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helps to increase the revenue for
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economy of the nation and
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infrastructure
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trend
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some negative developments , one of the major drawbacks is that many people have started relying on
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commuting even where public transport could be a choice. So, the emission of
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carbon
dioxide
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been
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increasing
day by day
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the environment on a larger scale. In conclusion,
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dropping
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of
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tickets
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more merits on
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and country
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their demerits are inevitable. It is recommended that
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and
air
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compaines
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companies
should work together by investing more
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public
transpost
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transport
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it
covenienent
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convenient
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maintaining
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a subtainable
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subtainable
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sustainable
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engine to beat the carbon
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footprint
.

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