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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Press Submit to send to your teacher. Press Help to see model answer.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Press Submit to send to your teacher. Press Help to see model answer.
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The line graph
is
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given illustrates
of
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the
amount
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number
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 of guests to four international museums from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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,
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the vatican
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vatican
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Vatican
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museum
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 gradually increased throughout the years. Meanwhile,
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the london
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london
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London
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 science
museum
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haven't
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 developed since 1980. Looking at the details, in 1980 the number of visitors stood at approximately 5
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millions
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million
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 and had been growing until
reached
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a reached
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peak
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a peak
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at
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of
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 nearly 10
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millions
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million
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 customers. Similarity
as
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to
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 number
of
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apply
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Louvre
who have
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had
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 the most visitors in 2015. Meanwhile,
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the london
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london
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London
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 science
museum
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 started with 4
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millions
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million
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of
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visitors and in five years remained steady until it
drops
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 and slowly decreased until only
have
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 less
3
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than 3
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millions
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million
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of
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guests.
On the other hand
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, Shenzhen
museum
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 stood at the same number as
their
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theirs
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 and fluctuated through decades.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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