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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the data about different types of families living in
poverty
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 in Australia in 1999.
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, there are six
six
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classifications, including single aged person,
aged
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an aged
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couple
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,
singe
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single
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 without
children
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,
couple
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 without
children
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, sole parent and
couple
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 with
children
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. Categorically,
poverty
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 rates are higher for single persons compared to households with
husband
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a husband
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 or wife. In terms of
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the totally
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totally
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 situation of
whole
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Australia
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, there were 11% of households in
poverty
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 in 1999, with the accurate figure
was
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 1837000. Those consisting of single aged
person
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persons
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 figured at 6%(54000), which was
relatively
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a relatively
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 low
poverty
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 rate
comparing
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compared
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 with
other
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others
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.
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, sole
parent
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parents
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 and single without
children
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 were the most prone to be poor, at 21%(232000) and 19%(359000) separately. For families with partners,
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couple
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couples
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 with
children
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 were the most common in
poverty
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, at 12%(933000),
while
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 still approximately half of the highest.
Couple
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 with
children
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’s figure was lower, at 7%(211000). The proportion of aged
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couple
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couples
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 was the lowest in families with partners but
also
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 entire households, at only 4%(48000)

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Vocabulary: Replace the words poverty, couple, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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