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The pie charts below show the area and current population of the seven continents as a percentage of the total. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the area and current population of the seven continents as a percentage of the total. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie
chars
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charts
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 demonstrate the proportion of
world
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land
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area
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 and the percentage of
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world
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the world
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population
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Antartica
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Antarctica
 has 9% of the
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world
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land
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area
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 but
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the populaion
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populaion
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population
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overall
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,Asia has the largest percentage of
population
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 and
land
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area
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 to live as compared to other countries
such
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South
America
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 ,North
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AMerica
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America
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Oceania
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 and Europe .
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Oceania
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 has the lowest fraction of individuals in the country . Asia contributed 69% of
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world's
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the world's
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population
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whereas
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asia
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Asia
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 has only 30% of
land
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 to live
.
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in.
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of
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to
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 North
America
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 ,16% of
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world's
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the world's
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land
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area
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belong
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belongs
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 to North
America
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 and only 8% of
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world's
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the world's
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population
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reside
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resides
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 in the same country . The proportion of living space in South
America
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 is 12%and the number of people living there
are
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is
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 higher than the
area
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 of
land
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. Europe has 12% of the
world
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's
population
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 and 7% of the
world
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's
land
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area
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 . Africa contributed 20%of
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world
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land
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area
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whereas
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Oceania
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 has only 6% of the field/space in the
world
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 .The percentage of folks in Africa is 13%,
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however
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oceania
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Oceania
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 has 0.5% of
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population
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the population
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, land, area, population, america, oceania with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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