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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in four countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in four countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The charts illustrate four
society
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societies
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 (
India
, Sweden, Morocco,
Vietnam
), which produced
electricity
 with usage
three
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of three
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 different categories of
soursec
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sources
 (Fossil fuel,
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
, Nuclear
power
),
energy
 from 2003 to 2008. The units are measured in
percantge
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percentage
percentages
.
Overall
, in
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general
generally
generall
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generall,
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 the amount of
use
 of nuclear
power
 is
lowest
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the lowest
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 per cent and
it is clear that
 the most significant
energy
 that
use
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is used
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in produced
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to produce
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electricity
was
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is
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Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
. In two
counties
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countries
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 (
Morocoo
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Morocco
 and
Vietnam
), there
are
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is
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 no rate of nuclear
energy
 to
product
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produce
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the
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apply
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electricity
. In terms of
India
 and Sweden, in
India
 the most substantial
power
 was Fossil
feul
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fuel
feel
 and
it
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is
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 comprised
of
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apply
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82% per cent
also
 the number of
Hydro
power
 was 14% and the remaining chunk of
sources
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source
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power
 was for nuclear
power
 with 4%. Regarding
to
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apply
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Sweden, a
graduall
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gradually
gradual
 different in
proportion
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the proportion
a proportion
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 of 2
sources
 (
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Hydropower
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Hydro
power
 and Nuclear
energy
) can be seen and
fee
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a fee
the fee
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of
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for
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 2
sources
 was 52% and 44% respectively
in addition
 fossil
feul
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fuel
 accounted for 4% in the period given. With regards to the remaining society, in
Morocco
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Morocco,
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 there is no operation of
neclear
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nuclear
energy
 and the most
sources
 to
made
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make
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electricity
 was
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
 with 95% in the given period
furthermore
 fossil fuel was the lowest
sources
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source
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 in
India
 to
made
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make
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electricity
 during the period question with just 5%. About
Vietnam
,
similary
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similarly
similar
 to Morocco in
this
 country (
Vietnam
), the society did not
use
of
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apply
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Nuclear
eneregy
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energy
 to produce
electricity
 what is more
allowner
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all owner
owner
 of Fossil fuel was little more than
use
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the use
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 of
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
 to produced
electricity
 with 56% and 44% respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words india, vietnam, electricity, hydro, power, energy, use, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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