The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
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The diagrams below depict the life circle of a silkworm and the steps in the manufacture of the
silk
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cloth. From an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent, that both processes are divided into several particular stages. The
process
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of formation and life cycle of the silkworm starts from the laying of eggs by the mother worm. After 10 days of the maturing the larva generate. The silkworm larva consumes mulberry leaves
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and grows for 4 to 6 weeks. After the nymph is ready for another step, where
silk
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threads are produced and after 3-8 days larva makes the cocoon. The final step is the ageing
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which lasts 16 days and forms the moth. The second diagram shows the production of the
silk
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cloth. There are particular stages in
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technique.
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is the action of
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selecting
silk
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shells
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good quality and boiling them.
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shells enter to unwind
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where 300-400 m. threads are produced followed by twisting and weaving steps. Both of these stages
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participated
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in the dying
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in dyers for making specific
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