The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The given diagrams show the several stages of the
cement
production
process and the
using
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the
cement
in concrete manufacture. From an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent, that both
of
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processes have some particular stages. As is presented in the first picture, the first step in
the
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cement
production
is the blending of the limestone and the clay, the next stage is the crushing
both
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raw materials by
special
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mechanism. When the mix of limestone and clay is ready, they go through
mixer
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for stirring and after by pipe
follow
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to the rotating heater. The material
exposed
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by
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high
temperature
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and should be
grind
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a grind
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after by
grinder
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the grinder
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tool.
Finally
, there is the
cement
as a final product which should be packed in bags and ready for
consuming
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. The next graph depicts
the
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concrete
production
. The substance consists
from
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four products:15%
cement
, 10% water, 25% sand and 50% of gravel. All
is
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mixed in the concrete mixer and make concrete as a
production
in the output.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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