WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of household expenditure in one country spent their weekly salary in two different years in 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, in 1968, families
spent a huge amount of their weekly income
on food, while
in 2018, families
spent their weekly salary on buying or renting either a house or apartment and also
spent on leisure. However
, in both years families
spent equally of their weekly income
on household goods.
Firstly
, in 1968, food had the highest percentage of weekly purchases by households with 35 per cent, while
families
in 2018 spent only 14 per cent of their weekly income
. People in 1968, spent most of their weekly income
on clothing, power and personal goods more than people in 2018, which were 10%, 8% and 6% respectively, while
in 2018, were only 5%, 4% and 4% of their weekly spending.
Secondly
, households in 2018, spent a lot of their weekly income
on their leisure time more than families
in 1968, which was 22% in 2018, and only 8% in 1968. Additionally
, by 2018, housing came to second place in weekly spending with 19%, and following that, was transportation which was 14% of their weekly income
, while
families
in 1968, spent only 10% on housing and 8% on public transport. Finally
, in both years 1968 and 2018 families
spent the same amount of their weekly income
on household items which was 7 per cent.Submitted by ghazl.1998g on
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