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Wast disposal in four cities and the percentage of total waste

#wast #four #cities #percentage #waste
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This
 bar chart illustrates the amount of total garbage in
Toronto
, Madrid,
Kuala
Lumpur
 and
Amman
.
This
 garbage
include
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 landfill, incineration, recycling and composition. Generally
speaking
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Toronto
showing
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 the highest percentage of
wast
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waste
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 disposal than the other three cities in
landfill
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landfills
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.
Whereas
Amman
rpresents
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represents
presents
 the lowest city in compositing
wast
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. In comparison between
Toronto
 and
Madrid
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Madrid,
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 you will see that
Toronto
 demonstrates about 75% of landfill,
while
 Mdrid is 28%.
On the other
hand
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Toronto
 showed almost
nearest
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precentages
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percentages
percentage
 in
inceineration
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incineration
, recycling and compositing which are 10%, 7% and 5%
respictively
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respectively
. By moving to
Kuala
Lumupr
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Lumpur
 and
Amman
 you will notice that the majority of waste is from incineration
from
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which is about 55% for
TKuala
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Kuala
Lumpur
. Added to that
Amman
 showed the lowest percentage of compositing other than
Kuala
Lumpur
 3%.
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end
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the
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recycling is taking
the
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a
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 bigger place in
Kuala
Lumpur
 than
Amman
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in Amman
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 by 10%.
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