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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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This
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 diagram illustrates the flow of producing
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brikes
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brakes
bikes
bricks
 for
construction
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the construction
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 industry.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
brickes
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brick
 manufacturing
is
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has
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 undergone several complex stages. The first stages focus on the
exteraction
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extraction
 and formation,
whereas
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 the
last
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 stages focus on
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the preperation
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preperation
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preparation
 of
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brikes
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brakes
bikes
 under determined temperature, and ending with packaging and delivering. In terms of the first phases, the digger is used to obtain the clay,
then
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 the metal grid is
uitilized
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utilized
utilised
 to
fillter
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fill
 them. After that, the outcome, which is
a
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apply
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sand, is mixed with water. The mixture is
whether
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apply
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chopped by wire cutter or
putted
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put
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 in
mould
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the mould
a mould
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 to form the
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brikes
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brakes
bricks
bikes
. In
next
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the next
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 phases, the shaped
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brikes
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bricks
brakes
bikes
 are
dryed
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dried
by
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in
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oven
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an oven
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from
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for
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 24 to 48 hours. In the following step, the
brikes
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 are sent to another oven under heat from
200C
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200
 to 1300 and
then
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cooling them
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.
Finally
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, they are packaged and delivered.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brikes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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