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the charts below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.the tabel shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

the charts below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.the tabel shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
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The bar chart shows the
export
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 earnings of a country in five categories in 2015 and 2016,
while
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 the table shows the percentage change in
export
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 values between the two years.
Overall
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, the earnings from most
export
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 categories increased in 2016 compared to 2015, except for gems and jewellery. Textiles had the largest growth percentage,
while
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 agricultural products saw the smallest increase. Looking at the details, petroleum products remained the highest earning category, increasing by 3% from around $60
billion
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 in 2015 to slightly more in 2016. Engineered goods
also
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 rose significantly by 8.5%, reaching close to $62
billion
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 in 2016.
On the other hand
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, gems and jewellery decreased by 5.18%, dropping from $42
billion
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 in 2015 to about $40
billion
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 in 2016. Farming goods went up a little by 0.81%, staying close to $30
billion
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. Textiles had the biggest increase of 15.24%, growing from about $25
billion
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 to more than $30
billion
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. In summary, the country’s exports performed positively
overall
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, with textiles showing the highest improvement,
while
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 gems and jewellery showed a noticeable decline.
This
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 result
is showing
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shows
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 interesting trends in the
export
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 market.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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