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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in different parts of the world. Summer use the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and male comparisons where relevant.
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The charts present the proportion of
population
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the population
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 living in urban areas in different parts of the world.
Overall
, the amount of
population
 in the whole world and several areas
such
 as Africa, Asia, Europe, Latin
America
, and North
America
 has been growing through the period. North
America
is
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has
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 the highest
population
.
Meanwile
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Meanwhile
, Africa is the lowest.
The
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apply
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North
America
 reach their own record in 2050 which is 87%
population
. In
the
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apply
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1950
it
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apply
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just 64%
population
in
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was in
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 the urban area. Following Latin
america
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America
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 that
have
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 84%
people
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of people
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 that live in
this
 area
at
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in
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 2050. But they just
have
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had
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 42%
people
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of people
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 in 1950.
Furthermore
, in 1950 Europe just
have
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51%
population
 in the urban area and the percentage will increase in 2050
into
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to
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 78%.
Then
, For Asia and Africa
its
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it
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seem
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seems
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 similar in 1950, there is 15% and 17% people, respectively. And will have increased in 2050 around 51% and 54%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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