The line graph and table below show the percentage of graduates that got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia, and the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012.

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math

graduates

who got full-time jobs compared to other

graduates

, and the table presents the average earnings

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survey was conducted at a specific university in Australia with data from 2004 to 2012.

Overall

, the percentage of

math

graduates

remained

slighlty

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salary in 2012 rather than other

graduates

. Regarding the graph picture, in 2004, the number of

math

graduates

who got full-time jobs stood at 80%, which was 20% higher than other majors.

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, in 2006, as

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graduates

percentage surpassed

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85%,

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former students increased insignificantly

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77%. Interestingly,

although

they had a similar rate in 2008, other

graduates

experinced

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experienced

a descending trend and

math

graduates

continued to

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slightly, with the

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rate of 76% and 60%, respectively. As for the table about salary, both former college students have a similar trend in the two first years. After that, in 2008,

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graduates

suddenly rose higher than

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, reaching 50,000 in 2008

while

other

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recorded 5,000 lower. When

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can

earned

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51,000 in 2010, other

graduates

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obtained

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it in 2012.

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The line graph and table below show the percentage of graduates that got full-time jobs after graduating from a university in Australia, and the average salary of both these types of graduates, from 2004 to 2012.

A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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Some ex-prisoners commit crimes after being released from prison. What do you think is the cause? How can it be solved?

Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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