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Some people feel that learning a foreign language is an essential component of a child’s education. Others feel that learning a foreign language is often a waste of time that can be better spent on learning about technology and other more vocational subjects.

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Throughout the history of education, learning a foreign
language
 or
languages
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 has been a constant component. Of course, many
people
 feel that
this
 is really an unnecessary part of education for everyone, but
this
 is not a point of view that I share. The opponents to learning a foreign
language
 might argue that most
people
 do not travel that often outside their own country.
In addition
 to
this
, out of all the countries of the world, comparatively not many share the same
language
.
Therefore
, learning a foreign
language
 will only be useful for the very limited
time
 that
one
 spends in a country where
this
language
 is used. For some
people
, the
language
 might never be used in their entire lives. When
one
 thinks about how much
time
 and money are spent training
language
 teachers, buying resources, going on trips and delivering lessons for
such
 a negligible benefit,
this
 would seem to be a very inefficient allocation of resources.
However
, the benefits of learning a foreign
language
 go
further
 than just the ability to use it from
time
 to
time
 on a holiday or business trip.
Firstly
, through learning
one
language
,
one
 gains an understanding to some extent of how all languages work.
Thus
, no matter where
people
 might end up around the world, the knowledge of
language
 can be of use.
Secondly
, with the study of a foreign
language
,
one
also
 opens oneself up to other cultures.
This
 allows in turn an appreciation for different points of view and belief systems. With an ever-shrinking world
due to
 globalisation, the ability to empathise and understand
the
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people
 from other countries is vital to reducing conflict and creating a more tolerant society.
Finally
, quite simply learning languages is excellent for the improvement of general cognitive skills. It seems to me that learning a foreign
language
,
therefore
, is more than just gaining the ability to speak a few words of a foreign tongue. It is part of intellectual and social development and needs to be continued for everyone in today’s schools.
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