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The pie chart shows the main reasons for why agriculture and land become less productive. The table show these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990. Summarize the main feature and make comparisons while relavant.

The pie chart shows the main reasons for why agriculture and land become less productive. The table show these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990. Summarize the main feature and make comparisons while relavant.
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pie chart illustrates the principal reasons for
land
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degradation
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 worldwide, and the
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table shows the causes of
land
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degradation
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 by region.
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,
over-gazing
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over-grazing
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 and
deforestation
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 are the primary reasons for
land
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degradation
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 in the world.
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, the maximum amount of
land
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 is
d`egraded
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degraded
 in Europe because of
deforestation
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 and
over-gazing
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over-grazing
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.
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, the maximum amount of
degradation
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 happens in Oceania. Over-gazing is the primary cause of
land
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degradation
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 in the world, and 35% of over-gazing causes
land
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degradation
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.
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, 30% of
deforestation
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 and 28% of over-cultivation are responsible for making
land
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 less productive. Only 7% of other reasons are responsible for
land
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degradation
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. The major proportion of
land
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 is degraded in Europe, which is 23% and the primary reason for
degradation
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 is 9.8% of
deforestation
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.
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, the highest proportion of
over-gazing
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over-grazing
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 happens in Oceania which is 11.3%, and it is the principal cause of
land
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degradation
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 in that continent.
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, no over-cultivation is
happning
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happening
 in Oceania. The lowest amount of
deforestation
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 is
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happening
happning
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happening
 in North America, which is only 0.2%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, deforestation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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