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The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.

The line graph gives information relating to the average number of British travelers using car, bus and train to commute on a daily basis over a period of 6 decades, starting from 1970.
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The given line graph illustrates the number of commuters in British
travelers
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 using three different vehicles from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the car and train experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the bus experienced
a downward trends
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a downward trend
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 over the period. In detail,the number of
the
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apply
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UK
commuter
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commuters
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 who
using
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 a car started at 5
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millions
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million
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, and increased gradually to 7
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millions
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million
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 in 2000.The figure maintained the same level between 2000 and 2010.
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 the proportion climbed rapidly to 9
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millions
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million
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 over the next 20 years.In
case
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 of
train
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trains
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 started at 2
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millions
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million
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, and
rise
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rose
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 merely to 3
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millions
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million
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 from 1970 to 2000.After
that
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 the figure escalated dramatically to 5
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millions
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million
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 in the final year. Turning to the figure for
bus
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buses
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 started at 4
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millions
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million
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, and
decreased
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will decrease
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 slightly to 3
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millions
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million
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until
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by
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 2030.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • mode of transport
  • fluctuating trend
  • downward trend
  • public transport policies
  • preferences
  • railway infrastructure
  • economic factors
  • environmental factors
  • technological factors
  • sustainable commuting
  • noticeable increase
  • investments
  • dominance
  • propensity
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