Task 1. The graph show the participation of australian children in sports outside school hours in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparisons where releavnt . task 1

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The bar graph informs us about the percentage of Australian students participating in sports

such

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as swimming,

football

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, netball, basketball and no sports aside from school hours in 2014. Except for

football

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and basketball, we notice more female enrollment in the categories. The highest disparity can be noticed in

football

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and netball, where male and female students dominate respectively.

Football

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is a favourite of many boys, with 20% compared to less than 5% of girls.

In contrast

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, netball is the

preffered

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preferred

sport for girls, with 18% and only 2% boys. A third favourite for both

the

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groups is swimming, with 16%

females

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of females

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and 13%

males

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of males

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opting for it. Enrollment in basketball is 8% males and 7% females, making it the least

most

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apply

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popular option for their chosen game. Only 5% of girls and 4% of boys choose to not practice any sports in their free time.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

146 words

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Task 1. The graph show the participation of australian children in sports outside school hours in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feautures and make comparisons where releavnt . task 1

The use of corporal punishment (physical hitting students) in schools is in decline, yet it should be used to improve behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think children have the freedomto make mistakes,while other people believethat adults should prevent children from making mistakes.Discuss both sides and giveyour opinion.

The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that visiting museums is the best way for children to learn history, while many others think there are several better ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.