The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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This
bar chart illustrates the proportion of
households
which are owned or rented from 1918 to 2011, in England and Wales.
Overall
, the
rate
of
households
in owned accommodation had an upward trend from 1918 to 2001,
while
the percentage of
households
in rented accommodation had a
decrease
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trend
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almost the whole period. The fraction of rented houses started from above 75% in 1918, which is
also
the highest
rate
of the whole period. After that, figures fell to almost 70% in 1939 and
then
remained stable until 1953. Meanwhile, the percentage of owned houses had a decrease
around
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20% from 1918 to 1961. In the year 1971, the proportion of owned and rented accommodation
equaled
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50%. The
rate
of owned houses
furthermore
wents
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up and peaked at almost 70% in 2001.
Although
, after 2001 the
rate
of owned properties experienced a drop from almost 70% to
near
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63%.
In addition
,from 1971 to 2001 the figure
of
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the
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rented properties plummeted to above 30% and in 2011 it had an increase of 5%. All in all, the percentage of owned
households
was higher than rented
households
between 1918 and 1961,
while
the rates of rented properties were higher from 1981 to 2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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