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The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides
the
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apply
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data
of
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on
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 different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002.
Overall
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,
plactics
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plastics
is
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are
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 the
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items
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item
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 with the least recycling
items
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 over the
years
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,
whereas
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 glass shows a significant increase. Glass become the most significant
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items
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item
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 that
increase
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has increased
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 the
number
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 of recycling materials over the
years
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. Starting from over 15% in 1992
then
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rose
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rising
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 rapidly to over 25% in 1997 and nearly 50% in 2002. The trend
similarly
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happen
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happens
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 to paper
items
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. It shows a
rising
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rise
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on
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in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
recycling
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recycled
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 paper
items
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 from over 25% in 1992 to 30% and
near
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nearly
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 40% in 2002.
On the other hand
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 cans and
plastics
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plastic
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 materials show
an
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the
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 opposite trend. The
number
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fluctuating
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fluctuated
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 on recycling cans
items
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; from nearly 20% in 1992 and fell to over 10% before its rise again to approximately 23% in 2002.
Lastly
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, the
number
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 of
recycling
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recycled
show examples
items
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on
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of
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 plastics remained stable over the
years
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with
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at
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aorund
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around
 10% throughout the
years
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words items, years, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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