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There is more need for houses at the moment, people think that they should built houses at the countryside. A small group of people think that they should not build it in the countryside. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, cities have a lot of structure, and many people think cities need to have more
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apartment
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at
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in
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 the
countryside
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.
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, some people think the opposite of
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 idea. I particularly agree about it. İt has many pros and cons. İnitially, farm communication, industry communication,
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education
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 communication.
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countryside
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 affects to
farming
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the farming
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 factor of countries because fields and empty hills
are very suit
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 for farming. One survey shows farming activities are probably happening in
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countryside
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 region, and
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 survey was approved by experts. Recently, we needed to build
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apartment
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 but ı think it shouldn't be in the
countryside
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.
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,
industry
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 factor has a big role in the
countryside
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. İf we can build structures
at
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countryside
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, there will be more crowded and there will have a better economy. We can't
be farming
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 there
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, We can earn a lot of
many
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 from there because when you build
structure
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a structure
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at
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somewhere, there are will be developed.
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 is inventable. They are not just about development but
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education
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 quality will arise automatically.
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 it has
a logical reasons
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a logical reason
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,
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education
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necessery
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necessary
 for the growth of the population. İf we have a lot of
group
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 of people,
Government
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the Government
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 must improve to
education
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 system and these happen because of the development
entrance
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of entrance
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 In conclusıon, built houses
at
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in
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countryside
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the countryside
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 have fifty-fifty advantages and disadvantages. İf we build
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apartment
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apartments
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 in the
countryside
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, we can develop their sides of
education
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 Use synonyms culturedisciplineimprovementinformationlearningliteracyscholarshipschoolingsciencestudy It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. and industry but it has
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 a harmful effect. Farming factor is a really important activity for countries and
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 damages with
countryside
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