There is more need for houses at the moment, people think that they should built houses at the countryside. A small group of people think that they should not build it in the countryside. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, cities have a lot of structure, and many people think cities need to have more

apartment

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at

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the

countryside

.

On the other hand

, some people think the opposite of

this

idea. I particularly agree about it. İt has many pros and cons. İnitially, farm communication, industry communication,

moreover

education

communication.

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essay includes all of them. First and foremost, the

countryside

affects to

farming

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the farming

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factor of countries because fields and empty hills

are very suit

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for farming. One survey shows farming activities are probably happening in

countryside

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region, and

this

survey was approved by experts. Recently, we needed to build

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apartment

but ı think it shouldn't be in the

countryside

.

However

,

industry

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factor has a big role in the

countryside

. İf we can build structures

at

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in

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the

countryside

, there will be more crowded and there will have a better economy. We can't

be farming

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there

although

, We can earn a lot of

many

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money

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from there because when you build

structure

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a structure

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at

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apply

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somewhere, there are will be developed.

This

is inventable. They are not just about development but

also

education

quality will arise automatically.

Also

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it has

a logical reasons

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a logical reason

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,

For example

,

education

is

necessery

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necessary

for the growth of the population. İf we have a lot of

group

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of people,

Government

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must improve to

education

system and these happen because of the development

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In conclusıon, built houses

at

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countryside

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the countryside

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have fifty-fifty advantages and disadvantages. İf we build

apartment

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in the

countryside

, we can develop their sides of

education

Use synonyms culturedisciplineimprovementinformationlearningliteracyscholarshipschoolingsciencestudy It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. and industry but it has

also

a harmful effect. Farming factor is a really important activity for countries and

this

damages with

countryside

's

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.