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The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the UK's ageing population in 1985 and makes predictions for 2035. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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A glance at the provided chart reveals a great deal of information about the elderly population of the UK people in 1985 and 2035 using a likely prediction. It is evident that the
aging
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 population is growing in all mentioned countries focusing on some specific countries.
To begin
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 with, Waled demonstrates the highest
persentage
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percentage
 in both years 1985 and 2023.
Moreover
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, it is predicted that Scotland will be in the second level in 2023 (about 25%). After that, England, Northen, Ireland and UK show the similar amounts by making a prediction in 2023.
However
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, these three countries have not been the same in 1985. To comparise, England and
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the UK
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 show a similar amount
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15% and 23% for both years (1985 and 2023), respectively.
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,
Northen
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Northern
 Ireland
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 the lowest
persenatge
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percentage
 in 1985
although
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 the predicted amount in 2023
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 not
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 a considerable difference
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from
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 other
nationals
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageing population
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Predictions
  • Proportion
  • Region/Regional
  • Statistics
  • Gradual change
  • Elderly
  • Life expectancy
  • Healthcare
  • Birth rate
  • Comparative analysis
  • Trend
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