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Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Transport Preferences Among Young People The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar
chat
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chart
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 provides key information about transportation for young people in four
countries
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countries'
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perferences
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preferences
. The units
measured
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 in
persentage
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percentage
.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the car is the most
usefull
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useful
transport
 among the four
contries
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countries
In addition
,
Bicycle
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the Bicycle
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 is the second
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most usefull
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usefull
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useful
transport
 in 75% of
contries
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countries
,
whereas
Motorcycle
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the Motorcycle
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 is useless for the most of
contries exept
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countries except
United
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the United
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 States.
According to
 what is shown, in The UK,
United
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the United
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statws
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states
 and Italy
car
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cars
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 seem to be the most
usefull
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useful
transport
, Italy takes the biggest
percent
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by
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73% which is the highest fate in the table graph.
However
,
car
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cars
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is
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are
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 not
high
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as high
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 as
Bicycle
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bicycles
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 in France. In
term
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terms
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 of
Motorcycle
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Motorcycles
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 is less used in most
contries
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countries
,
while
 it is the
seconed
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second
 largest
transport
 in
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the Unite
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Unite
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United
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 States.
However
, bicycle takes
reasenable
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reasonable
percent
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per cent
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 among the four
contries
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countries
. For
exmaple
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example
 in The UK it takes 30% which is half of the use for cars.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, contries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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