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The graph illustrates the percentage of government spending on road and transport. in Italy, Portugal, the UK and the USA. Summarize nad make comparison where relavant.

The graph illustrates the percentage of government spending on road and transport. in Italy, Portugal, the UK and the USA. Summarize nad make comparison where relavant.
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bar chart illustrates the percentage of government spending on
road
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 and
transport
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 in four different
countries
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, Italy, Portugal, the UK and the USA from 1990 to 2005.
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, Portugal spent the highest and Italy spent the second-highest on
road
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 and
transport
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 among
four
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countries
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. The UK and the USA spent relatively
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 than Portugal and Italy. Meanwhile, the expenditure of Portugal on
road
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 and
transport
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 experienced an increase. For other
countries
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, the expenditure fluctuated. In 1990, Portugal spent the highest on
road
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 and
transport
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 among all
countries
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 and spent around 27%
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road
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transport
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. It slightly declined to approximately 24% in 1995.
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, in 2005, Portugal spent around 20% of its budget on
road
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 and
transport
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.
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, Italy spent roughly 23% on
road
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 and
transport
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 decreased to around 20% in 1995. After an increase in 2000, it again decreased and reached around 19%. The USA spent around 11% of its budget on
road
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 and
transport
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, and it increased to around 15% in 2005. The UK,
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, spent approximately 10% in 1990 on
road
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 and
transport
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. After a decrease, it increased to around 14% in 2000.
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, it declined to around 7%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, transport, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 8 times.
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