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The best way to understand other culture is to work for a multinational organization. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#culture #work #organization
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In recent times, Some pupils believe that the best way to know other cultures is to
work
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 for a multinational organisation. I
am partially agree
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given
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statement, Because
of know
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knowing
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 other
culture
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cultures
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or traditions
are
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can
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 easily get
information
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 through
travel
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.
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,
work
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 on multinational organisations through
get
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information
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 about other
nation
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national
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companies
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. On the one
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hand
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, there are multifarious
reason
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reasons
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 why getting
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 through
travel
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 is vital for
people
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First
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 and foremost significant aspect is travelling is the optima platform for everyone, there are different kinds of
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platform
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platforms
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is
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 beneficial to know
other cultural place
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another cultural place
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,
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 ,which useful to gain
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,
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 different kinds of places getting more
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,how to maintain them
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, it is helpful to gain numerous
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people
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knowledge
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people
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 who
travel
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different places who get more
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.
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, there are numerous reason why
multinational
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the multinational
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 organisation is not helpful in every
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 first and foremost reason is
multinational
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a multinational
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 corporation is beneficiary only corporation or
companies
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 as a They can give only limited
knowleads
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knowledge
know leads
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companies
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personal life.
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 if any kind place which is famed it is not more vital for Multinational
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, multinational
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 are provided limited
knowledge
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people
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 suffering all world and they know
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 about all places which
is
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 well-
known
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a
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but
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information
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 is only For personnel .They can
be not use
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in their corporational
work
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. In conclusion,
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companies
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about
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they give only
corporation
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knowledge
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,
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People
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 who
not
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 know other
culture
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cultures
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. In my opinion
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knowing other
culture
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cultures
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 is the optimum way to
travel
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.
Travel
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 through getting all
information
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 easily.
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