The charts below show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030

The charts below show energy sources in Australia in 2008 and predictions for 2030
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Introduction The charts gives information about energy productions in Australia in 2008 and has some interesting predictions about 2030. Overview Overal in the chart we can see more coal in 2008 and so much
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in 2030.The lowest energy source in two dates that's a Hydro power. Main body 1 At the first i will start with 2008. In 2008 the highest source that's coal 39% the lowest source is hydro 0,20%.But the hydro industry so similar with wind resource.
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the
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can locate in the second place after coal 32%. Main body 2 In
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paragraph i want write about predictions in 2030. For the future resource the Australian scientists think.They will connect with
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industry so much than coal.Because the
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in 2030 has so much percentages is 32%.But in 2030 they will use wind and resource more than 2008.
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the gas can grow in 2030 on a 10% from 22% to 32%.But the other energy is not going up the other energies can stay in 4,30%.

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