Some people think that Olympic games are exciting events that bring other nations together. Others say Olympics is a waste of money and the money could be better spent on other things. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A great part of
the
society Correct article usage
apply
believe
that the Olympic Change the verb form
believes
games
improve the bonds between countries, others, oppositely, consider that all the efforts should be put in
other ASUNTOS. From my perspective, the event is an excellent opportunity to
On the Change preposition
into
one
hand, athletes from all over the world wait for their moment to shine and to become one
of the best in their discipline with the company of their family and friends; in addition
, sport
fans love spending hours watching the different exhibits. Change the noun form
sports
For example
, Simone Biles, from the United States, an
extraordinary gymnast has won several Olympic Add a missing verb
is an
games
medals, and independently of her gender or origins, society gets excited about it and celebrates her triumph. I Capitalize word
Games
belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
this
should not only happen once in four years but everyday
, congratulating every little win a person achieves.
Replace the word
every day
On the other hand
, events like the Olympic games
require absurd amounts of money due to
stadium refurbishment, people
working, among others. Correct word choice
and people
For example
, in the last
games
in Paris, millions of euros where
destined to clean Correct your spelling
were
Sena
Correct article usage
the Sena
river
as Capitalize word
River
one
of the swimming races took place there. However
, people were dissappointed
and angry with the authorities because the river had to be clean always not for just Correct your spelling
disappointed
one
event, as that was just to give a great impression. The citizens claimed that all that money could have been used to improve other areas in the city. The way I see it is that resources should be used for real issues.
To summarize, while
most of the
society is happy and celebrates sports, people continue struggling and suffering different problems that could be solved by using cleverly the money.Correct article usage
apply
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task achievement
Ensure that every introduced point is thoroughly explained and supported with examples to clarify your argument.
coherence cohesion
Include a more detailed conclusion that sums up both views before providing your final opinion to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly presents both views and the writer's opinion, establishing a clear focus for the essay.
task achievement
The essay uses relevant examples, like the reference to Simone Biles and the cleaning of the Sena river, to support the main arguments.