Some people think that Olympic games are exciting events that bring other nations together. Others say Olympics is a waste of money and the money could be better spent on other things.  Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A great part of
the
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society
believe
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that the Olympic
games
improve the bonds between countries, others, oppositely, consider that all the efforts should be put
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other ASUNTOS. From my perspective, the event is an excellent opportunity to On the
one
hand, athletes from all over the world wait for their moment to shine and to become
one
of the best in their discipline with the company of their family and friends;
in addition
,
sport
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fans love spending hours watching the different exhibits.
For example
, Simone Biles, from the United States,
an
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extraordinary gymnast has won several Olympic
games
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medals, and independently of her gender or origins, society gets excited about it and celebrates her triumph. I
belive
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that
this
should not only happen once in four years but
everyday
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, congratulating every little win a person achieves.
On the other hand
, events like the Olympic
games
require absurd amounts of money
due to
stadium refurbishment,
people
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and people
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working, among others.
For example
, in the
last
games
in Paris, millions of euros
where
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destined to clean
Sena
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the Sena
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river
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as
one
of the swimming races took place there.
However
, people were
dissappointed
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disappointed
and angry with the authorities because the river had to be clean always not for just
one
event, as that was just to give a great impression. The citizens claimed that all that money could have been used to improve other areas in the city. The way I see it is that resources should be used for real issues. To summarize,
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society is happy and celebrates sports, people continue struggling and suffering different problems that could be solved by using cleverly the money.
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task achievement
Ensure that every introduced point is thoroughly explained and supported with examples to clarify your argument.
coherence cohesion
Include a more detailed conclusion that sums up both views before providing your final opinion to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly presents both views and the writer's opinion, establishing a clear focus for the essay.
task achievement
The essay uses relevant examples, like the reference to Simone Biles and the cleaning of the Sena river, to support the main arguments.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Promotes global unity
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic benefits
  • Job creation
  • Tourism
  • Infrastructure
  • Active lifestyle
  • Financial undertaking
  • Economic burden
  • Underutilization
  • Wasted resources
  • White elephants
  • Opportunity cost
  • Critical areas
  • Social welfare
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