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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and the type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and the type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information, and make comparison where relevant.
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This
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 line graph gives information about the food and the
number
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consumption
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 by Australian kids, between 1975 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear from
this
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 line graph that it has different
type
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types
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 of food,
such
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like
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as
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 pizza, fish and chips and
hamburger
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hamburgers
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.
in addition
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,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 went up in
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number
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a number
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 of kinds
consume
Wrong verb form
consumed
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 food.
whereas
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, fish and chips of how much it was consumed by teenagers.
According to
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 what it shown,
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 rose
signficantly
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significantly
 between 1975 with
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number
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a number
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 of 0 to 2000 as it
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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reached
number
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 100
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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consumptions
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consumption
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 throughout the years.
in contrast
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, fish and chips dropped from 100 in 1975 to slightly under 40 in 2000. in terms of pizza, it slightly rose from 0 in 1975 to 20 in 1980, and it climbed between 1985 to 1990 which
is
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apply
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eventually increased in
number
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 in 2000 year to 80 how much it was eaten per year.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • fast food consumption
  • increase
  • decline
  • trend
  • popularity
  • Australian teenagers
  • hamburgers
  • pizza
  • fish and chips
  • steady rise
  • sharp decline
  • comparison
  • amount and type
  • notable changes
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