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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make com-parisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make com-parisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line chart provides data on the childbirth
rate
 in England among females between 1973 and 2020.
Overall
, the birthing
rate
 had significantly increased among 28- to 34-year-old females in England,
while
 the 20- to 25-year-old
age
group
 showed a drastic drop.
However
, the two other
age
groups
 remained relatively stable throughout the given period. In 1973, the birth
rate
 in the 20-25
age
group
 started at 120, and it was the highest among all
age
groups
. After that, it steadily decreased and stopped at slightly under 20 per 1000 women, reaching third in all
age
groups
. The 28-34
age
group
 started at around 20, continued to increase, and surpassed the previous top
group
 in 2021 and, with 80, gained a top position among all
age
groups
. The under 20 years female
initially
 showed 20 rates and remained relatively stable, reaching just above 20 in 2000. Meanwhile, the forty-plus-year-old women's childbearing
rate
 dropped around 8%, starting at approximately
ten
Correct your spelling
10
 and ending at a minimal level of 1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, age, group, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Birth rate
  • Fluctuating trend
  • Economic factors
  • Family planning methods
  • Societal norms
  • Stabilization
  • Economic conditions
  • Fertility treatments
  • Demographic change
  • Maternal age
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