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The bar graph below give information computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the year 2002 and 2010.

The bar graph below give information computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the year 2002 and 2010.
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The bar chart provides key information about
education
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the education
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level
 of computer owners for the
year
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years
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 2002 and 2010. The units
measured
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are measured
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 in percentages.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that there is an increase in the
percent
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percentage
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 of
computers
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computer
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 ownership
year
 by
year
in
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for
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 all people.
In addition
, higher degrees
' are
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apply
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 usually
owning
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own
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 more computers,
wherease
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whereas
lower
level
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levels
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 of learning
are taking
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take
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 less percentage.
According to
 what
shown
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is shown
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,
their
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there
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 is a significant rise in the
year
of
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apply
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2010
combaring
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compared
 with 2000. Each
level
 has been rose after 2000.
Moreover
, the
grouth
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growth
 is more in lower levels of education.
For example
, no
hight
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high
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 school diploma climbed
for
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to
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 about 27%. In terms of the
increasing
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increase
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 in high
level
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levels
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 of education is not
big
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as big
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 as lower levels.
For example
, Postgraduate
qualication
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qualification
qualifications
 rose by 15%. The increasing rate
is decreasing
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decreases
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 when the
egudcation
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education
level
 increases.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for example".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words level, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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