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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives

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In our contemporary era with the evolving scientific landscapes, people's perspectives towards the benefits of
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scientific discoveries are
with
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significant
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 divergence.
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 some advocate that the primary goal beyond scientific achievements must be far more than improving living standards, I would strongly argue that the main aim must be to
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 the community's quality of life.
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 could be through tackling the
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 difficulties,
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 to empowering the economy by the exploited technological development. Obviously, one of the essential targets of
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scientific advancement is the ability to address the pressing global challenges.
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 to say, rather than spending the resources on aimless projects, it is of paramount importance to focus on improving public
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 standards.
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, owing to the astonishingly developed medicine,
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humanity
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 discovered the demanded vaccine, that
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 to treat Covid 19 cases in
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 time.
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 been regarded
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 main factor in ending the global pandemic and quarantine events in 2020.
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, those who advocate that the research significance must be reflected
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 boosting the general population status have insisted on the
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 factor. In other
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, through
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sustainable technology,
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economy could be enhanced.
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 role in
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 more job opportunities and fostering the living environment.
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 the Internet and AI
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 there is robust communication between community members that will strongly drive
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economical
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 recovery.
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 of dissipating knowledge findings on
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, I absolutely think ,it is far more important to make use of
these
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researchs
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 on people's daily
life
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economy
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the economy
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 and
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 hard conditions.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the clarity of your arguments by being succinct and avoiding overly complex expressions.
Task Response
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Task Achievement
The essay addresses the prompt effectively by discussing the importance of science in improving people's lives.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion that frame the argument well.
Task Achievement
The use of relevant examples, such as the COVID-19 vaccine, strengthens the argument.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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