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WRITING TASK 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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According to
 some
people
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people,
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 vital goal of
science
 should be to develop
humanity
. Nowadays we are living in the world that
science
 established . Our life is
surrounding
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with
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by
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science
.
That is
 why I firmly agree that
science
 should
be improve
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improve
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peoples
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people's
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 lives. In
this
 essay I will discuss
this
 statement, how
science
 was developed and
affects
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effects
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 on
peoples
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people's
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 social aspects . The profound impact of
science
 on
society
 is evident in the way people access information today. In the past centuries
a
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science
 was unpopular even the community
prefered
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preferred
 it
contrast
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 thing for them.
Moreover
, a postindustrial
society
 was the improvement of
science
. After industrial
society
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society,
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 the countries
undertood
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understood
understand
 the value of
science
 and
then
 the governments funded
a
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science
,
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 because it improved the country,
a
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the
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 population, a
society
.
For example
 in
19th
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the 19th
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 century Japan was poor , a military country,
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and furthemore
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furthemore
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furthermore
 the government was funded on
science
especially
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, especially
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on technology
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 sphere. Now we can see
after
this
 Japan had
an
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a
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 rapid
increse
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increase
 in
economy
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the economy
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,
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 and had
amount
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an amount
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 of profit
due to
science
.
After
this
science
 has been working on
humanity
. The spin-offs of
science
 always helped
for
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humanity
.
In
addition
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addition,
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reserch
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research
 works are helpful
the
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in the
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 spheres of healthcare.
For instance
, it helped when it was dangerous diseases in
19th
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the 19th
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 century. When it was
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the first
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first world war
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First World War
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 people died because of flu, and
then
 the
french
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 scientist Paster discovered an antibiotic. It is an outstanding example of how
science
developes
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develops
peoples
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people's
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 life.
Moreover
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science
 affects
on
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apply
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space technology which
had
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has
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huge
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a huge
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 impact on
humanity
. The foundation of
internet
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the internet
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 was
an
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impactful for scientists to develop their
science
 works. In conclusion
the
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science
 should be
do
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an
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a
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 remarkable achievement
on
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in
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peoples
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people's
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life
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lives
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, and
did
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its aim to
improving
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improve
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 it.
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