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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate the portion of fruit and vegetable per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate the portion of fruit and vegetable per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The bar chart provides
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information
infomation
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information
 about the percentage
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consumption
comsumption
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consumption
 of
fruit
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 and
vegetable
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 per day in the UK
during
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between
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 2001 and 2008
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,
fruit
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 and
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vegetable
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vegetables
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was
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 the most popular
to
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among
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 women every year that the bar chart presented
while
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fruit
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 and
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vegetable
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vegetables
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was
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were
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 the least popular
to
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with
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 children. Looking at the percentage of men who consume
fruit
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 and
vegetable
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, It started
around
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at around
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 16
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2001 and marginally
flunctuates
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fluctuated
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dropped
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dropping
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 around 26
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percent
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per cent
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.
Similary
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 to children, It started
about
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at about
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percent
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per cent
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 and a minimal
flunctuates
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fluctuates
 before
dipped
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 approximately 21
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percent
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per cent
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at the end
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 of
given
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 period. Moving on to the portion of
fruit
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 and
vegetable
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which
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apply
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eaten
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 by women, In 2001, The
comsumption
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consumption
 of
fruit
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 and
vegetable
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 was approximately 20
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percent
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per cent
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 and steadily increased until 2006 before slightly fell to around 30
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percent
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, vegetable, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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