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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides key information about how unemployed individuals spent their time
last
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years
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year
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 in the United Kingdom. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that females spent a major time on
houswork
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housework
 tasks during the morning and the
afternoon
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.
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, hunting
job
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jobs
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at
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in
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 the morning have a substantial figure by males,
but
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apply
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they prefer to watch TV
at
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in
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afternoon
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the afternoon
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.
Accourding
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According
 to the data shown, morning shopping represented significant ratios with both
gender
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genders
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 with 20% and 26% respectively. Gathering with friends or family members was more common at
afternoon
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 activities
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, by the two
genre
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genres
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.
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,
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 gardening
have
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 the highest numbers
by
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in
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men's
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the men's
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categories
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category
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 with 14%
at
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in
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morning
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the morning
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 and 13%
at
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in
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afternoon
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the afternoon
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. In terms of staying in bed, it is obvious that both
gender
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genders
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 indicated equivalent ratios during the morning with 8%.
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, drinking and practising sports were the lowest fraction on the table at the two mentioned times.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words afternoon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratios" was used 2 times.
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