The line graph show internet users as percentage of population

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The line chart compares the proportion of using the Internet in three different countries during 10 years. It is clearly observed that at the beginning of the year the USA had the highest percentage of using the Internet
while
, Mexico was lower.
Also
,
at the end
of the year, the highest proportion of Internet users belonged to
Canada
. In 1999, the figure for using the online network in the USA was about 30%
whereas
, that of
Canada
and Mexico were lower at approximately 20% and 10% respectively. Over the next 5 years, the percentage of network members in the USA and
Canada
rose significantly and reached nearly 70%
while
, that of Mexico was lower at 35%. In 2009,
Canada
had the highest percentage of utilizing the World Wide Web around 100%.
In contrast
, Americans and Mexicans used the online network
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almost 80% and 40% respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words canada with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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