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The charts show (Chart a) the average speed of urban zone traffic (in kilometres per hour or kph) in a number of countries over a fifty year period, including a future estimate; and also (Chart b) the total number of urban zones per country (in thousands.) Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and ma

The charts show (Chart a) the average speed of urban zone traffic (in kilometres per hour or kph) in a number of countries over a fifty year period, including a future estimate; and also (Chart b) the total number of urban zones per country (in thousands.) Write a report summarising the information. Select and describe the main features, and ma
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The charts show the average velocity of city traffic over a fifty-year timescale, with a forecast for the future, and
also
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 the number of urban zones by country. As can be seen, the general trend is for the speed to increase and
then
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 decrease.
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, in
France
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France,
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 it rises significantly from 60
kph
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 in 1970 to a peak of 86
kph
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 in 1990 tailing off to a forecast of 52
kph
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 in 2020.
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Similarly
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 we see the USA peak at 57
kph
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 in 1990, declining to 43
kph
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at the end
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. The
Uk
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UK
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 and
Rusia
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Russia
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 have a similar trend, rising to 56 and 72 respectively in 2010 before falling
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below the starting level.The same happens in Canada with a decline
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from
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 69kph
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to
 64
kph
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 despite a peak of 73
kph
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. Chile,
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however
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 fluctuates around 51
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 but remains static over the period. Italy, Brazil and Spain
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, show a clear rise, finishing at 58,57 and 61
kph
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 respectively. Regarding urban zones, all countries except one see predicted increases of roughly four times by 2020. The exception is
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Russia
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, which sees a fall of
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about
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 a half to 3200.
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 the data does not suggest any correlation between increasing urban zones and average traffic speeds.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words kph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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