The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work on one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008, Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where refevant.

The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work on one

region of Australia in 2001 and 2008,

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparison where refevant.
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The column chart illustrates the
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for individuals who were hired in five kinds of jobs (sales, accounting, computing, nursing and farming) in Australia in the
years
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2001 and 2008.
Overall
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, the sales
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were the largest
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of employees among
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all five types in both 2001 and 2008.
In contrast
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, the
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of farmers was the lowest in these
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.
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, there was a minimal change in the count of hires at the same time. In 2001, the
salers
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were at the top
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nearly 155000 employees and
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rose slightly to well over 160000 in 2008. in these 2
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, the
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for accounts was approximately
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a constant
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(about 60000).
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, the
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for employees in computing was as many as nursing (just over 50k) in 2001,
however
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, the computing
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had a higher increase than nurses in 2008 and the difference between them was nearly 50000 in
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year. the farmers have the lowest level in
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bar chart. In 2001 the
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of farmers was just over 20k and it fell marginally to just under 20000 in 2008. The
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for all kinds of
workers
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increased after 7
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,
whereas
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the
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of accounters and farming
workers
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decreased in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, years, workers, number with synonyms.
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