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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#development #communication #people #friends
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 that these days the use
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communication
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 widely .In
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 and disadvantages . In
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 that a person can
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 his friends without the need to
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maney
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 for coffee and saves time on transportation if the person wants to meet his friend.
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 addition, a person can
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video
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 with his family in any country.
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, people will be never alone. On the one hand , a few people
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online
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youngsters
 is too dangerous because it has a lot of bad
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 can be expected.
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, If the internet is not working
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people can't
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 each other. In conclusion, Opponents and supporters .
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 incredibly invention An indispensable invention .
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coherence cohesion
Develop your introduction to clearly state your position on the topic and briefly outline your main points. This will help set a clear direction for your essay.
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Ensure that each paragraph contains a clear main idea, supported by specific examples and explanations. This will enhance the clarity and completeness of your response.
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Address both positive and negative aspects more clearly, and provide examples or scenarios to illustrate your points. This will improve the task response by showing a balanced understanding.
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Your essay attempts to discuss both advantages and disadvantages of online communication, which is a good approach to this type of question.
coherence cohesion
You’ve made a clear conclusion that restates your position, showing an understanding of essay structure.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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