Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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suitable places in order to
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time without any fear. they do not have
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and
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young people often tend to live
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, I believe
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moment without thinking of any responsibility.
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You have a clear understanding of the task, attempting to argue both sides of the argument and provide your opinion.
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You consistently compare the positive aspects of teenage years and adult life, showing a balanced view on the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • teenage years
  • responsibilities
  • free time
  • stress
  • social life
  • intense friendships
  • first loves
  • new adventures
  • exhilarating
  • invincibility
  • optimism
  • sense of accomplishment
  • fulfillment
  • career achievements
  • personal growth
  • financial independence
  • passions and interests
  • lasting relationships
  • parenthood
  • emotionally stable
  • maturity
  • life experience
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