The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram process illustrates the life cycle of salmon.
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,
its
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it's
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a
nature
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natural
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cycle with seven stages which starts with eggs in
fresh water
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freshwater
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hatching
of
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apply
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which
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apply
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approximately
in
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apply
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3 months and the process ends with the appearance of an adult
fish
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, after 2 weeks it will
die
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. First of all, the
procees
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process
begins
as
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with
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the emergence of eggs in water, after 3 months they
turned
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turn
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into Alevin, for growing up at
this
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phase they
feeds
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are fed
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by
youlk-sac
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yolk-sac
you'll-sac
few
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for few
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weeeks
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weeks
. The third phase of
fish
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life called Fry they spend 5 to 10 weeks. When
fish
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turn into Parr it looks bigger and has lines on
it
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its
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back.
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, Smolt is a
fish
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that is
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1-3 years old and has more development fins it will group and head out to sea,
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it becomes an Adult
fish
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and spends 1 to 8 years in the sea and it gets even bigger.
At the end
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the
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last
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stage
its
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is
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'
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the 'spawing
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spawing
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spawning
adult' after that
fish
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look like
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a giant
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giant
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giants
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with a hump after the neck, they develop a more
powerfil
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powerful
jaw and the
fish
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dies at
this
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stage after two weeks.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cycle
  • diagram
  • life cycle
  • main features
  • overview
  • stage
  • salmon
  • comparison
  • differences
  • significant
  • summarize
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