The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture illustrates the various processes of evolution in the life cycle of the salmon.
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, the process consists of main 7 stages,beginning with
layingeggs
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laying eggs
in fresh water and ending up with adult salmon.The process is natural and cyclical. First of all,adult fish lay
mucheggs
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much eggs
in
fresh water
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freshwater
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hatch
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a hatch
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in about 3 months.
Secondly
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,
alevinsappear
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alevins appear
, which is
need
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needed
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to feed off yolk-seo for several weeks to gain strength.
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this
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, the fry grows between 5 to 10 weeks old ,
however
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,they are still not good enough to swim actively. In the next stage,the fish parr several months old, which
is start
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starts
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growing fingers.
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, they become smolts, which are 1 to 3 years old.At
this
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stage,they
leaves
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leave
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ocean
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the ocean
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they are used to and adapt to life in another sea. Adult fish after spending 1 to 8 years in the ocean become big and ready to allocate spawn.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cycle
  • diagram
  • life cycle
  • main features
  • overview
  • stage
  • salmon
  • comparison
  • differences
  • significant
  • summarize
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