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The table below shows the average household expenditure on three categories (housing, food, and entertainment) in five different countries in 2023. CountryHousing (%)Food (%)Entertainment (%) USA302515 Canada282018 UK352012 Australia252220 Germany332315 Task: Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the average household expenditure on three categories (housing, food, and entertainment) in five different countries in 2023. CountryHousing (%)Food (%)Entertainment (%) USA302515 Canada282018 UK352012 Australia252220 Germany332315 Task: Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table demonstrates the average amount of money spent in percentages on household items namely housing ,food and
entertainment
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 in
USA
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the USA
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, Canada,
UK
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,
Australia
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, and Germany in the year 2023.
Overall
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 ,all the five
countries
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 spent the most percentage on housing compared to food and
entertainment
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.
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 ,all the
countries
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 spent the least percentage on
entertainment
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 . In terms of housing ,
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UK
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the UK
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 had the highest
expenditure
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 at 35% compared to the other
countries
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,
whereas
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Australia
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 spent the least amount at 25%. In regards to food
expenditure
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, both Canada and
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UK
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the UK
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 spent the same amount (20%) ,
while
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USA
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the USA
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 had the highest
expenditure
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 at 25% For
Entertainment
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 ,
average
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the average
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expenditure
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 was between 12 to 20 % in the five
countries
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.
Australia
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 had the highest percentage
expenditure
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 at 20%
while
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 both Germany and
USA
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the USA
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 had the same
expenditure
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 at 15%.The lowest was 12%
that
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which
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 was spent by the
UK
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.
Australia
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 and Canada spent 20% and 18% on
entertainment
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 respectively.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words entertainment, uk, australia, countries, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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