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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
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In the modern world transportation means a lot, especially transportation of daily or not
goods
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 to supply the population with their needs.
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 process
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 needs to be the
safest
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 as it can be, so ones think that the best solution for it would be an annual driving
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 requirement for
drivers
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.
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 it is a good choice, the logistic improvement is crucial too.
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,
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drivers
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 licence is obligatory to drive vehicles,
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otherwise
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 it is illegal.
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, getting it requires only one
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 taking, so the result of it will be enough to drive for the whole life, in case
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one drives safely, without any illegal episodes. It is quite enough for driving in cities, though driving long distances may be endangered
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 if the driver is not completely prepared for challenges on roads. Avoiding unexpected situations could be done by providing annual driving
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 results to the governments and supervisors
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 lorry
drivers
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. Perhaps, it would decrease any possibilities of accidents, and increase the
safety
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 of
goods
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transfer
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.
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,
safety
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 could be provided not just with
drivers
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' efforts, but by efficient planning too.
Logistics
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 play an important role in
goods
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transfer
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, as good
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 means
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 and quick supply of them to consumers. Being an expert in
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 field means that the person should have
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knowledge of each car accident and road construction, so
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 could avoid any hopeless situation on the roads.
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 why each
transfer
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 company needs
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expert
logistics
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 to produce the best road for lorries in case of time efficiency and
safety
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 not just of the
goods
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, but
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drivers
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of drivers
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 themselves too.
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, nowadays the improvement of transportation offers an unlimited source of
goods
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 for ourselves, though the
transfer
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 of them may be unsafe.
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some
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,
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 could be avoided by providing a driving
test
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 each year, which is
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 a good solution.
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, efficient planning by
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 is
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 crucial as the former statement
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, such as statistics or case studies that highlight the effectiveness of annual driving tests or logistic improvements.
task achievement
Clarify the main argument of each paragraph to make your ideas more comprehensive. For example, in the paragraph discussing logistics, outline specific measures or technologies that can enhance safety.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion regarding road safety for goods transport.
coherence cohesion
The argument for annual driving tests and logistic improvements is logically structured, with each idea developed in separate paragraphs.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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