Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK

Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK
IELTS Writing Task Chart for Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK
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The chart and table compare leisure action and household activities between
men
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and
women
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in 2008 in the UK.
Overall
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it is clear that
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,
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apply
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men
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spend more
time
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on leisure activities than
women
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,
whereas
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daughter
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daughters
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spend more
time
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on household activities. As the table shows,
men
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spent more of their
time
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on TV, video, and radio rather than
women
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, 137
minutes
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and 118
minutes
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, respectively.
Men
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read a bit less than
wife
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wives
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, 18
minutes
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and 19
minutes
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.
Men
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had more interest in sport and spent more
time
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on sport than
women
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, 15
minutes
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and 11
minutes
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, respectively, in 2008 in the UK. As the chart shows, cooking and washing always did
women
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and spent more
time
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than
gentleman
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gentlemen
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, 68
minutes
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USE SYNONYMS It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score. and 25
minutes
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. For shopping
female
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females
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spent more
time
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rather than
men
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, 30
minutes
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and 25
minutes
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. For repairing
men
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spent twice more
than
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as
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women
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, 18
minutes
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and 9
minutes
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, respectively, but for washing and clothing,
wife
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wives
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spent three times more than
men
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, 24
minutes
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and 8
minutes
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, in 2008 in the UK

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, time, minutes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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