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The graph below shows the percentage of people who travelled by bus in the UK from 2009 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of people who travelled by bus in the UK from 2009 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table below illustrates the proportions of citizens who used the
bus
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 for travelling in the UK between 2009 and 2011. In general, Using
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bus
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the bus
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 for shopping and visiting friends
were
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was
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 the
higest
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highest
percentages
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percentage
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 among other categories.
Whereas
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,
less
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fewer
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 people used
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bus
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the bus
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 for
working
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work
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 in all three years.
To begin
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 with, The
number
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 of public who use
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bus
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the bus
a bus
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 for shopping was 65 per
cent
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 in 2009.
Then
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 the figure decreased slightly in the next two years and reached 51% in 2011.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of populations who
using
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use
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bus
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the bus
a bus
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 for visiting friends stood at 19 per
cent
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 in 2009 and 2010.
Then
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 the
number
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 grew suddenly to 23% by 2011.
On the other hand
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,
There
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there
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 are only 4% of folk went to study by
bus
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 in 2009. The figure remained unchanged in 2010 and 2011 with 9%.
While
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 people who used
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bus
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the bus
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 for working was just 5 per
cent
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 in 2009. In 2010, the
percentages
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percentage
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 declined slowly to 2%. In 2011, nobody used
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bus
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the bus
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 for work.
In addition
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, Using
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bus
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the bus
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 for
day
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a day
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 tour was only 7%
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period.
Then
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rising
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rose
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 slowly to 12 per
cent
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 in 2010 and the
number
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 remained
same
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the same
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 in 2011.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bus, number, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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